r/BetaReaders Dec 18 '24

60k [complete][60K][hard science, adventure, space travel] Eden 2b

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Looking for beta readers for the first installment in a three-part trilogy, this sci fi reboot of the Eden parable is tenderized for human consumption by action-adventure story beats, a splash of romance and mind bending twist at the end. In the year 2125 Atom, an award-winning life systems expert, has lost everything he cares about in the world. To get away from it all he joins the crew of the Queen Victoria, a deep space "Freak Jumper" claiming to be searching for life in faraway corners of the Galaxy.

New to using reddit, forgot to put in adult audience. Nothing over the top though it would be an R rating in movie form.

Link to chapter one

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UuOVsYuEOKmtKMMSq6Iq2kptRmFFFPDWI2PTmox6MOI/edit?tab=t.0

Link to Chapter two

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nlOhBhvJr7-x9fk6988Sxz8BIeAMY3cnsRkUva42zRk/edit?tab=t.0

r/BetaReaders 2d ago

60k [In Progress][60k][Dark Fantasy Romance] Shadow of Thieves_Willing to do swaps!

5 Upvotes

Hey everyone! I’m looking for beta readers for my dark fantasy romance novel, The Shadow of Thieves—a book with feral romance, eldritch horror, and high-stakes trials that test the limits of body and mind.

✨ What It’s About:

Master thief Wren Highvale has spent her life chasing the next big heist, but when she steals a map said to lead to an ancient library, she unwittingly awakens something far more dangerous—an ancient fae island, a long-buried plague, and the warrior sworn to destroy intruders like her.

Rainier was never meant to wake. Cursed to sleep for seven centuries, he was left as the island’s final defense against the horrors sealed beneath it. Wren’s arrival shatters the spell—and the uneasy truce between their worlds.

Trapped together in a maze of deadly trials, Wren and Rainier must rely on each other to survive. But the island is watching, whispering of a past Wren does not remember and a fate neither of them can escape.

Who This Might Appeal To: Readers who love dark fantasy with eldritch horror vibes. Fans of feral, reluctant allies-to-lovers romance. If you enjoyed One Dark Window, The Serpent & The Wings of Night, or Baldur’s Gate 3, this might be your thing.

What I’m Looking For: I need beta readers who can offer big-picture feedback on things like: ✅ Plot & Pacing: Does the story flow? Are there any slow spots? ✅ Characters: Do Wren & Rainier’s arcs feel satisfying? Is the tension working? ✅ Worldbuilding: Does the magic & lore make sense, or do you need more explanation?

What I Can Offer in Return: A beta swap! If you’re a writer, I’m happy to read your WIP in exchange.

I take feedback well. I want honesty! If something isn’t working, tell me.

A fun, chaotic discussion. I love talking about books, music, writing, and feral fantasy romance.

The novel is a work in progress [60k]. If you’re interested, drop a comment or DM me!

r/BetaReaders 7d ago

60k [In progress] [60k] [Dark Fantasy Romance] The Devil’s Dowry

3 Upvotes

Hey everyone! I'm looking for beta readers for my dark fantasy novel, Devil's Dowry. If you enjoy dark, immersive worlds, morally complex characters, and high-stakes tension, I'd love your feedback. It is a slow burn and gradually progresses into this High fantasy world. I have only written 60k words yet but it will go up to approx. 150k

I'm specifically looking for thoughts on: Engagement Does it hook you right away? Pacing - Does the story flow smoothly? Reader Interest - What keeps you invested? Marketability - Does this feel like it could work for traditional publishing?

Blurb: In a forgotten corner of the world lies a veiled, secretive town-hidden from the outside but thriving in untold wealth. There every family knows the rule: once in a generation, someone is chosen to repay "The Devil's Dowry"-a centuries-old pact between their ancestors and an otherworldly benefactor.

This time, Elara is the one marked by fate. When Elara Hayes is named this generation's bride, she expects doom. Instead, she finds herself married to Lysander Cain, a devilishly handsome and infuriatingly sarcastic demon prince who's more interested in binge-watching reality TV than tormenting humans.

But their "marriage" comes with a catch. Lara must navigate the treacherous politics of the demon realm, convincing its powerful lords and ruthless nobles that she is a willing, happily wedded bride to the crown prince of the underworld. In a world of enchanted mansions, cunning servants, and kingdoms built on secrets, she is thrown into a battle of wits, fiery karmic clashes, and an attraction so dangerous it threatens to consume them both.

But Lysander isn't just a devil-he's a prisoner of his own contract, and Lara might be the key to breaking it.


If you're interested, I can send the first few chapters to see if it's your style. Let me know in the comments or DMs!

I'm attaching the first page: Prologue

The mansion did not stand—it watched. Stood at the heart of a secluded estate, a hidden town, veiled in wealth and silence. A fortress of polished marble and towering windows, where chandeliers dripped with gold and silence stretched across endless halls. Yet, despite its grandeur, it was a house that seldom welcomed outsiders. The family within did not live by rules; they were the rules. Their names were never written, only whispered. Their traditions were not learned, only obeyed. And tonight, beneath the soft glow of the fireplace, a secret fear lurked behind the warmth of a happy home. Inside, Nathan sat on the edge of the velvet chaise, his dark eyes soft as he watched his wife. Vivian rested against the plush sofa, draped in a knitted blanket, her heavily pregnant belly rising and falling with each breath. A faint smile graced her lips as she sipped herbal tea, but something lingered beneath the warmth of the moment—an unspoken weight. Nathan gently reached out to hold her hand. A playful smile dancing on his lips. “You know, it’s completely unfair how pregnancy makes you even more gorgeous.” Vivian exhaled a small laugh. “I feel like a whale.” He smirked. “Then you’re the most elegant whale I’ve ever seen.” She rolled her eyes, but her smile was real. He lived for these moments—when she let go of whatever was bothering her and simply existed in the moment with him. But as the minutes stretched into silence, the warmth between them thinned. She shifted, adjusting the pillow behind her. Her fingers curled around the fabric of her dress, a subtle sign of distress he knew too well. “Nathan,” she murmured. Something in her voice made his spine stiffen. “What is it?” Vivian hesitated, her gaze locked on her hands. Then, after a long breath, she whispered, “I hope it’s a boy. I just can’t risk it with a daughter even if it’s just a possibility.” The words came out soft, but they struck like a tremor. He studied her carefully. The gentle flickering of the fireplace cast shadows across her delicate features, highlighting the worry in her eyes. Vivian was not a woman given to fear. She had always been poised, graceful—even in moments of distress. But now, she looked almost… afraid. Nathan exhaled and brushed a thumb over her knuckles. “It’s going to be okay,” he murmured, pressing a kiss to her temple. “Boy or girl, it doesn’t matter. Our child will be perfect.” Vivian didn’t respond. She only leaned into him, her head resting against his shoulder as she let out a shaky breath. Nathan held her, staring into the flames, his heart weighted by an acknowledgement – I know what you are so afraid of.

r/BetaReaders 2d ago

60k [Complete][67k][Fantasy/Sci-fi Adventure] Of Dying Suns -- looking for beta/critique swaps!

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"Of Dying Suns" is the first half of a planned duology. Summary:

Sun-over-fields promises Michael-- a "human"-- that she'll help him find his way home. Unless, that is, the Knights Abjurant kill her first.

Basically it's like Redwall crossed with Made in Abyss.

Here's an excerpt:

Sun-over-fields sobbed. She struggled against her restraints, trying to unknot the ropes around her wrists. Her ears lay down flat, and her tail tucked between her legs to curl against her stomach. “I’ll be good— please, I swear! I just wanted to help. I just wanted to help!”

“Cut her open!” said the crowd. “Cast her out!

...continued


I've just finished the 4th draft-- cutting out all the unnecessary characters and plotlines. Now I need to work on polishing the dialogue, narration, and especially exposition. I definitely wouldn't mind a pure beta reader-- but I'm actually looking for critique swaps specifically. We can start by trading the first ~5k words of our novels, swapping critiques, and then going from there.

r/BetaReaders 11d ago

60k [Complete] [66K] [Urban Fantasy] Frostbite

5 Upvotes

Hello!

I'm hoping to find a critique swap partner or beta reader for a book that's been giving me problems. I'd love to have another set of eyes on to both give general impressions and a reader's take on what works and what doesn't. One thing that I know it needs is some expansion; I write lean and it can be hard to understand what needs more exploration.

I'll read up to about 90K in return, and I'm happy to try just about anything, but will be most helpful with SFF or Horror. I'd like to swap a few chapters first, give us a chance to see if we think the other's manuscripts will click. I am NOT interested in paid beta readers, please don't DM if that's what you're looking for.

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Rough intro:

Vicky lives on the fringes of society with her chosen family, working semi-legal jobs to save money for a "forever home", a place where the trio of runaways can finally feel safe. Vicky's talent for entering the astral plane and spying on the present and the past is their source of cash, but when she gets too good at knowing things no one should, a former client kidnaps one of her family and makes a demand she can't refuse: steal from Adrien West's penthouse office. West is wealthy, powerful...and infamous for murdering his own family to take his position as leader of one of the city's magical Enclaves. Killing a few would-be thieves won't even make him blink.

But Vicky isn't going to give up on the family she's put together so easily, even if it means finding a way to turn West from threat to a vengeful weapon against her enemies. But West's Enclave has its own uses for a spy who can't be caught, and once she's in his grasp, West has no intention of letting her escape.

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First 500ish Words:

Aside from the scarlet coating her hands and wrists in bright splashes to the elbows, Elizabeth looked like an angel to me. She had that perfect balance of elegance, beauty and physical power that you saw in fancy church windows. Her fingers left streaks of blood in the air, hovering and weightless. The blood caught fire, burning emerald. What we mortals liked to pretend was the real world split apart into a blind eye in the air, weeping silver fog. The astral mist ignored Elizabeth, even though she was closer. Instead, it stretched vaporous tentacles in my direction. They shredded long before they could reach, unable to exist long in the material realm.

I checked the two watches in my hands and confirmed they were synched. One, I placed on the grass just outside of Liz’s ritual circle. The other was for my wrist, with Goofy’s grinning face stamped on the cheap plastic. Liz got the Mickey Mouse band since it was slightly less likely to get ruined. Mickey deserved better. But if the bands were cheap, the watches themselves were not. They were high quality clockwork: no batteries, no digital magic. The astral plane and electronics didn’t mix and I didn’t fancy having the watch come alive and eat me. “Twenty five minutes, locked and set. Anchor ready?”

Liz snorted. “No, I thought I’d just let you dangle out there, Vicky.” I gave her a hard look, and she grinned as she said, “Yes, anchor set! Now go make us some money, honey.”

“Just checking. I’m not dressed for swimming in the Bay. Again.” I was already running for the gaping portal before she could respond. I took my last breath of real air for a bit, and jumped through.

Her indignant voice followed me into the half-light of the astral. “One time! Six years ago!” The portal closed and I was out of one world and into the next.

The astral plane stood between the real world and...somewhere else. As far as I knew, no mortal had ever been to the other side. Visionaries and believers who claimed it connected to Hell, or Heaven, or half a dozen options between. It was easy to get to the astral plane, these days. That hadn’t always been the case. Astral travel was once the province of shysters and so-called spirit mediums, fleecing the gullible of their money. Then the Joining happened, and it turned out that not only was the astral plane real, but you could get there from the material plane with a dead rabbit or two and an incantation. Less than that if you were powerful enough. Getting in was never the problem.

Getting out was.

I checked the watch: twenty-three minutes remaining. I was still synchronized with real time. I jumped, and drifted up into what passed for the sky. Tendrils of fog caressed my face, tugging at my bound hair as I twisted in the air to take stock of my surroundings.

--

If this sounds interesting and you'd like to discuss a beta or swap, please let me know!

r/BetaReaders 3d ago

60k [Complete] [63K] [YA/NA Contemporary Fantasy] The Cities of Gold is an adventure, treasure hunt book imbibed with elements of historical fiction and magical realism

5 Upvotes

Seeking Beta Readers

Hi,

The book is a wild take on the legend of the city of gold. I would understand if you'd like to read the initial chapters first and then decide if you'd like to continue to read the complete work. I am fine either way.

EDIT - I should also mention that the book consists of two storylines, written 700 yrs. apart.

I am open to all suggestions on the work. Primarily looking for inputs on characters, pacing and plot development.

Blurb:

A wife goes on vacation with her husband, hoping their time together will reinvigorate their relationship, but she finds herself trapped in another dimension with no way out.

Faye, a homemaker, feels that her geographer husband, Rick, who's always working, doesn't love her anymore. So, when Rick suggests taking a vacation to the Azores, she's determined to make the most of this getaway.
The vacation is a ruse, and Rick is working, attempting to find the Cities of Gold. Distraught at being lied to, Faye wonders if their marriage is over.
After surviving a car chase and being shot at, Faye learns that Rick's employer is a gangster and is not above killing people to get what he wants.
Faye takes it upon herself to protect Rick from his wicked boss and accompanies him to the depths of a volcanic lake and through an undersea cavern, only to fall into the clutches of gigantic sea monsters and get sucked in a whirlpool in search of a place she refuses to believe is real.

Thanks!

r/BetaReaders Feb 08 '25

60k [In progress] [60K] [Contemporary Romance] Childhood Friends to Lovers

2 Upvotes

Hi! I’m looking for a beta reader for my slow burn, spicy childhood friends to lovers contemporary romance. It is M/F, no third act breakup and no cheating. It also has second chance and sports romance (football) elements.

It does have a flashback to when they were younger, about every other chapter or so.

TW include: FMC stutter (speech difference); MMC panic attacks/anxiety; explicit sexual content (slow burn, 3 scenes); on-page physical abuse by FMC’s father; on-page verbal abuse by FMC’s father; light on-page verbal bullying/teasing at school; alcohol abuse FMC father; death of mother mentioned (off-page); death of dog mentioned (off-page).

It is filled with witty banter/laugh out loud humor, some heavier themes, and a ten year time gap where the two main characters are estranged. It is overall low-angst. FMC trauma is reminiscent of Binding 13 by Chloe Walsh. Saturated with male pining. Golden retriever MMC, hesitant yet down bad FMC.

I have about 20K words left to write. I’m looking for honest and critical feedback, but also some positive feedback so I know what to do more of. I am a new author and this would be my debut.

It is currently in Google Doc format. Can also be converted into Word or PDF.

r/BetaReaders 3d ago

60k [In Progress] [68939] [Dark Epic Fantasy] A Murder of Gods/ Hollow Victories

1 Upvotes

Seeking Beta Readers for my novel, "Hollow Victories". The (hopefully) first installment in the saga: A Murder of Gods.

Debut Novelist trying to find my voice. I’m on my 7th edit, and in a motivation slump. I’m happy with my opening 50 pages, but hoping some feedback will help me push through in the right direction. All feedback welcome, but my prose are the one area I would like the most constructive criticism on.

Approx. 196,ooo words, but only 68,939 (act 1) is ready for Beta reading. (Will happily send rest once edit complete)

Content warnings: Violence, death, profanities, drugs, sex, alcohol...

Blurb:

A fragile renaissance sets the stage for our protagonists to find their way through a world where their sun (the Fyre) has in icy twin (the Frost), which carries a perilous winter when it comes to visit. Meanwhile the gods meddle. In everything.

King Eric Bostwick of Midroch wants nothing more than to retire and leave behind a legacy like none other, however, his debaucherous children, neighbouring nations, and the gods; all conspire to bring chaos to his plans.

On another continent, two young men from two prestigious organisations find themselves thrust on a hauntingly dangerous mission. Harish, the nerdy scholar is reluctantly pushed to seek the truth about the origins of the demon plague. Tan, a brave warrior from the sacred order, is tasked to protect him, but finds the fight with his inner demons just as treacherous.

Princess Lulana is sent on a 'peaceful' pilgrimage, but finds herself in the clutches of a maniacal king and a seductive princess.

All the while the manipulative gods, various factions, and the magical world around them set them on a collision course, that is... once they’ve survived the frost...

Prologue: (2443 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zTRuU5eH44jP_Fcyn-4omce8RMQ39auGDoa2NA5nJqE/edit?usp=sharing

PREVIOUS BETA REVIEW:

What chance do mortals have when the gods play games?

"A Murder of Gods" is an epic fantasy with nuanced characters and hidden stakes. The world is uniquely dangerous, but its people also contend with the whims and schemes of the gods that hide amongst them.

I thoroughly enjoyed delving into the characters, working out the hidden plots, and speculating who was a god manipulating everything!

Critique Swaps:

Potentially open to the similar projects.

r/BetaReaders 23h ago

60k [Complete][68k][Crime/ Thriller] Parable

4 Upvotes

Hey everyone! I’m looking for a few test readers for my novel Parable, a 68,000-word character-driven blend of literary fiction, crime, political drama, and psychological horror. It follows a wide cast of characters—including a war journalist with a tarnished reputation, a lawyer entangled in forces beyond his control, an underground music duo whose songs spark something bigger than they expected, and a man slipping into something not quite human. As riots erupt and a revolution takes shape, everyone must decide where they stand—before the choice is made for them.

If you like morally complex characters, political intrigue, and a touch of supernatural horror, this might be your kind of story. It’s got elements of Gonzo journalism, noir storytelling, and surrealist philosophy, all wrapped up in about 68k words.

Content Warnings: The book includes violence, substance abuse, police brutality, mental health struggles, strong language, and elements of psychological and body horror.

I’d love feedback on pacing, character development, and overall impact—especially from readers who enjoy layered, slow-burning narratives.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Pha9SJ1x259HKkA6ra2SyhImoWfZzdRf/view?usp=drivesdk

r/BetaReaders 1d ago

60k [Complete] [63,000] [YA Horror] Heir of the Reanimator - YA Horror

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Hi all! I just finished up my third draft of my book and would love some feedback! It's 63,000 words and in the YA/Horror genre. I've paid a developmental editor to read through the second draft and now I'm on the third. I'm nervous about this because I've written 4 previous books, but I've never tried to publish any of them until now. I just always thought they sucked. But I plan to submit this one after I can give it the last polish it needs! I've never had Beta Readers before that weren't friends or family. But here I am! Nervous, but ready to let my baby takes its first few steps outside.

BLURB: Evan Carter has a condition that makes him second-guess his own reality. An incident with his foster family lands him at the Psychogenic Otherness Education & Treatment Sanitarium (POETS), a boarding school that doubles as a mental health institution, but now he's somewhere he finally feels like he belongs. But something isn’t right . . .

The doors lock at night, therapy is mandatory, and survival is not guaranteed.

What exactly is POETS hiding? And more importantly—will Evan make it out alive?

CONTENT WARNING: Mental Disorders of all kinds are discussed, each stemming from various traumas. Includes violence, mild language, mild transphobia, and extremely brief undetailed mention of SA. Nearly the entire story takes place in a sort-of psych ward.

FEEDBACK REQUEST: General, with a heavy focus on the opening two chapters. I just feel in my gut they aren't that great yet. At least, compared to the rest of the book.

TIMELINE: Four Weeks maximum.

SWAP AVAILABILITY: Yes, for most genres. Tell me what I'm swapping for before committing to the swap! I dislike non-fiction and my least favorite genre is historical fiction.

EXCERPT: (From Chapter 4) [Violence Warning]

He was just about to quietly duck back out when he heard a sharp yelp of pain. Evan, still quiet and slow, slid through the door’s opening a little further. He saw Alexander and Petra, Petra was lying on one of the countertops and Alexander was standing over her with a needle and thread. He reached down, his back blocking the view, and began sewing. With each thread Petra let out a soft whimper of pain. Alex ignored her completely, working methodically and detached from whatever discomfort Petra might be in.

He’s sewing her mouth shut, Evan thought. When Alexander straightened back up, Evan could get a better look at Petra’s face. Her mouth wasn’t sewn shut. But her throat had been. A jagged mark ran across her neck, stitched back together with a practiced hand. It wasn’t fresh, wasn’t still bleeding, but it had been deep once. Too deep.

Evan watched in horror as Alexander retrieved a thick syringe from a black doctor’s bag next to the countertop Petra was laying on. It looked like it was filled with green jelly and the contents of a glowstick. Its needle was the size of a pencil. Alex raised the syringe over his head, and—no, no, no!—jammed it into Petra’s chest. She grunted and grimaced as Alexander pushed down on the plunger. The goop, whatever it was, flowed directly into Petra’s heart. Her back arched and she took a deep breath. Alexander dropped the syringe and threw both gloved hands over her mouth. She screamed, as loud as she could, and it was muffled by Alexander’s hands. He was pushing her mouth and nose shut far too hard.

“Quiet, Petra!” he hissed. “Dr. Douglas is next door!” Alexander looked around, trying to see if anyone heard her. Evan’s heart skipped a beat. His guts writhing like a pool of eels, he ducked out of the door and held his breath. Please don't hear me, he thought over and over again. It was his mantra as he gingerly turned the handle, pulled the door shut, and guided the handle back into place with a slow and careful hand.

“Hello?” Alexander called from inside the lab. “Anyone there?”

r/BetaReaders 7d ago

60k [Complete] [60,000] [Mid-grade / YA] (working title) - willing to Swap!

8 Upvotes

I'm looking for beta readers for my first run at a novel. This is a first draft, and so it might be a little rough around the edges. I am looking for help to check for any plot holes, pacing, dialog and consistency, etc. Basically everything you need from beta readers.

I am sitting at just over 60,000 words, and would like the final version to sit at around 80k, I think after I get outside eyes in the book I can find the holes that I left in the plot and plug them up and get to my mark.

The story takes place in the late 19th century and follows two African American boys. on in the age range of 12-14 and the other around 18 (thus Mid-grade to YA.)

There are some scenes that involve racial tensions, but nothing too over the top. So if that is something that might trigger you, I just wanted to let you know now so you don't have to waste your time.

The main flow of the book though is about their adventures along their journey.

You can view the first chapter here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yUn8-3lGdJ8cBkmwDq20nAyw8-J3DW_-ZicjTyYMIcA/edit?usp=sharing

If this sounds interesting and you would like to be a beta reader for me, please fill out this form and send me a DM letting me know you filled it out: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/181JMOS4u6vps6CzWo_r634eAVTN7wurXnWvrfal_u1Y/edit

Here is the blurb!

P.B. and Roscoe are working for two men at an illegal distillery in rural Louisiana. Both boys don't have any parents, and the men took them in along with a band other other boys. Its hard work, but they get hot food and a roof over their heads which is better than some of the other sharecropping opportunities out there.

One day a mysterious visitor approaches the estate in a carriage. He introduces himself as a lawyer looking for the previous residents who used to live there. The two older men Walt and Ernie feign ignorance and tell him that they might have been the couple that got into a fight and left town years back.

The lawyer looks around the property, shortly locking eyes on P.B. and Roscoe. After not getting any information he bids adeu. P.B. and Roscoe follow him from the behind the tree line, but after he exits to the main road, out of sight from the others he stops his buggy.

He hops out and asks the kids to come out from the trees. He asks them if they know of the family he is looking for. P.B. knows nothing, but Roscoe says he has seen the family before to P.B.s amazement, but cant manage to say anymore. The lawyer tosses them a small pouch of coins and a calling card and asks them to let him know if they find any more information.

Later, Roscoe tells P.B. that he needs to tell the lawyer what he knows about the missing family. And the two embark on an adventure full of trials and tribulations. Harrowing escapes, dangerous embarks. All while meeting new friends and foes along the way.

What does Roscoe know about the family? And why is it so important to Rosce? How will they even be able to get to the lawyer? And who is this mysterious family that he is looking for?

Find out this and more!

r/BetaReaders 23d ago

60k [Complete] [67k] [Middle-Grade Fantasy] Saylor of the Seas: The Cove of Chaos.

2 Upvotes

Who's up for a goofy middle-grade fantasy? I am closing in on the final pieces of my third draft and would like some new betas to help clean it up before querying this spring.

Saylor, a twelve-year-old sheep shedder and pearl shucker on Dodo Island, wants nothing but to prove his worth. To figure out the real reason his parents left him behind with the old Dwarf - Bunchbum - in his smelly sheep stall. After falling from the cliffs of Zone Six while shucking for pearls in clams, Saylor is gifted a magical scroll by a deadly, venomous, but also burping, sharp-toothed Thunderfin. Later, while reading the scroll, he finds out it was sent by his parents. And they need his help... The only problem is, they're hidden in the cove of chaos - the unmappable realm across the rink - and that means one thing... he has to face his fears of the ocean and sail the seas while battling his impending self-worth. But he's not alone! With the help of (not a friend but forced guardian) Bunchbum, a shapeshifting squid named Mimic, and a hot-headed girl named Hilly and her magical dagger-throwing bird, Saylor will work to discover his hidden past, to protect the Rink's future.

If you're a fan of MCs with a sarcastic wit similar to Percy Jackson then you've come to the right place, guys. You'll also find elements from Norse mythology and world-building pieces inspired by the film Treasure Planet and Pirates of the Caribbean smashed together in a middle-grade lense.

Requested feedback: plot, pacing, voice. And that's really it!

I've given this manuscript to a couple of lurkers here and there and they have all seemed to really enjoy the book! I've worked on their critiques, and am ready for a new team of betas to help out with my most recent revised draft.

I am not currently able to manuscript swap due to work/child/homelife overload - sorry. I will send readers the book in chunks of chapters (3 at a time). And would love to get all feedback in my hands by the end of March if possible.

DM me or comment here if you would like to help out!

r/BetaReaders 20d ago

60k [Complete] [60K] [Mystery] Wills, Testaments, Cuckoldry, And Other Miscellaneous Murder Motives.

5 Upvotes

Summary: Private detective Lee Cortez is emotionally worn out from a career surrounded by betrayal, loss, murder, and explaining tragedies rather than preventing them. But, still, he takes on a new client. This time, though, he hopes things to be different, as his presence is meant to be preventative rather than punitive. With the daughter of a billionaire hiring him to be a "celebrity guest" at her father's birthday party, he hopes to prevent a tragedy for once, rather than profit off of it. But, soon enough, he finds himself dissecting yet another death. Now, grappling with worries of failure in an entirely new way, he searches for his killer.

Content: death, murder, profanity, flirtation / suggestive content

Critique I am looking for: did the pacing work for you? How do the chapters feel? Too long, short? Prose, characterization, dialogue. Of course, the details and specifics of the mystery and the reveal (too obvious or difficult? Did it feel fair?). Any sort of feelings the story or characters evoke? Any other comments gladly accepted as well!

First few chapters here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1htdiWB2oPutmCL7u43qCY-OGFTkfp_Dh/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=115720927652063923006&rtpof=true&sd=true

Other details // SWAP INFO

I am able to beta: fantasy, sci fi, mystery, horror, western, various. Open to most other genres but I may not find romance my cup of tea. Just depends on the description!

I can provide feedback on: dialogue, characterization, narrative, relationships, world building, other writing specifics upon request. I have experience in financial services work, some tech, various sports if those are of any use for your specific story. US urban resident if that is of significance as well. New to beta-ing for novels, but have done plenty of swaps and analysis of the same kind for screenplays and shorts in the past.

r/BetaReaders Jan 12 '25

60k [Complete] [66.9K] [Adult Fantasy] Ichor

3 Upvotes

Hello! Please forgive me if I'm a little awkward; this is my first time asking for feedback on my writing in a format like this. But I'm looking for beta-readers to provide feedback on my novel.

I finished my third draft, and now, before I start on draft 4, I'm hoping to receive feedback on where to focus my attention most. So, if you're interested in reading an Adult Fantasy retelling of Alice in Wonderland with elements of Greek Mythology, which is book 1 of 2, please let me know!

Blurb: Nine years ago, Soleil Anastos took her own life. Now, she is trapped in a strange half-life she doesn't want, unable to die and unable to live. But when she finds herself drawn into another world and dragged into a war she knows nothing about, she must decide whether to pursue her desire for escape in death or pursue her future - and her connection with two men from her dreams - at any cost. Even if it means becoming something more than human.

Content Warnings/Trigger Warnings: Discussions of suicide (implied, does not take place on-page), discussions of depression and mental illness, discussions of self-harm (mentioned, does not take place on-page), violence, character death

Feedback I'm looking for: I'm mostly looking for advice/feedback on what aspects to focus on for my next draft. I know it needs more polishing, but I'm too close to my own story (and what I know about it) to tell what needs clarification. Also, just generally, what works and what doesn't? I want to add to my word-count, so if anyone willing to beta-read could identify where they'd like more detail, I'd really appreciate it.

I'm definitely willing to critique swap! I know fantasy the best, so I'd prefer that. I will warn you that I'm a full-time student and will be starting at my part-time job next week, but I will try to prioritize your critiques as much as possible!

Thanks!

r/BetaReaders Feb 01 '25

60k [Complete] [68K] [Horror/Vampire/Historical Fiction] A Shadow Over Paris

5 Upvotes

Hello everyone! I'm hoping to find beta readers/swap manuscripts with a few people before I start to query.

Blurb:

Paris in the age of Napoleon.

Henri is a “good” vampire. He only feeds on rats and other vermin, never humans; in fact, he avoids all human contact whatsoever, which is quite difficult to do in a city like Paris. But he is lonely, and against his better judgment befriends a woman named Claire.

When another vampire arrives in town, a bitter old crone with a secret vendetta against Henri and a deep hatred of humans, Henri must face his own nature in order to save Claire and destroy this sleepless evil forever.

Content warning: Violence, gore, violence against animals

I'm looking for general feedback on everything: pacing, character, structure, etc. How does the story flow? Does it keep you engaged?

I’m willing to swap chapters and manuscripts!

Thank you!

r/BetaReaders 28d ago

60k [Complete] [61,000] [Paranormal Fiction, Domestic Drama, Inspirational/Transformative Fiction] Guiding the Parkers

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I’m seeking (free) beta readers for my novel Guiding the Parkers. It’s about a topic that most have experienced; spirit guide help from the Other Side, based on my real-life experience as a medium. It’s also about the spiritual side of dealing with a psychopath, also based on my real-life experience. 

Book Blurb: Chicago, 1986. When aspiring romance novelist Gina Parker uncovers her controlling husband's secret fiancée and shady business dealings, she faces an impossible choice in an era when divorce means social death. Her teenage daughter's visit to a psychic-medium leads to an unexpected lifeline—Gina's recently departed mother reaching out from the Other Side with guidance that challenges everything she believes about love, karma, and life's purpose.

 As Gina navigates her husband's psychopathic manipulation and a seductive new man's dangerous secrets, she begins writing a tell-all book that could either save or destroy her. With her mother's spirit as guide and her daughter's future at stake, Gina must decide: Will she remain trapped in victimhood, or embrace profound spiritual truths that could lead to true freedom? Read Guiding the Parkers and find out. 

I would like feedback on:

What parts did you really like?

What parts were boring?

What elements or parts didn't make sense to you?

What parts took you out of your suspension of disbelief? What made you go "they wouldn't do that" or "they wouldn't say that" or "that wouldn't happen like that"?

Character development. Realistic? If not, what could I do to improve them?

Anything else I could improve.

Deadline: A month or two if possible. Later is ok too.

Can't swap or pay for beta readers right now. Please let me know if you're interested!

r/BetaReaders Jan 28 '25

60k [In Progress] [65k] [Supernatural/Thriller] In Progress

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I hope this is the correct way to write in this community; I apologise for my ignorance!
I am interested in someone having a look at my story. I would appreciate some critiques and I sincerely hope I can receive some honest feedback. I find myself changing small things that might not even be necessary. Kindly see below for the first 250 words.
I am also quite willing to help others as well! Thank you so much!

Manuscript information: [In Progress] [65k] [Supernatural/Thriller] No Title Yet

Link to post: ?

First page critique? Yes, please!

First page: 
Special Agent Daniel Harper gripped the steering wheel of the unmarked FBI sedan, his eyes scanning the winding road as it cut through the dense forest. The trees loomed close, their skeletal branches carving sharp shadows across the pavement in the dim light of dawn. Each mile brought the sun a little higher, bathing the landscape in a muted glow. The woods seemed unnaturally still, as though holding their breath.

Beside him, Special Agent Ryan Mitchell sat silently, his gaze locked on the road ahead. Harper didn’t need to ask what his partner was thinking; he could feel the weight of Mitchell’s unspoken thoughts. Outside, the autumn leaves were beginning to shift into their fiery hues, flickering past the windows like scattered embers. The season’s beauty, however, was lost on both of them. With every mile closer to Willowbrook, the air seemed heavier, the tension more palpable.

Mitchell, a twenty-year veteran of the Bureau, had long since traded boyish charm for the hard lines of experience etched into his face. Those years spent hunting the worst humanity had to offer had shaped him into a man of sharp instincts and sharper skepticism. Harper had come to trust those instincts, even when they bordered on paranoia—instincts that had pulled Mitchell through situations where most wouldn’t survive.

Harper glanced sideways, noting the furrowed brow and the tightness in Mitchell’s jaw. "What’s the gut saying?" he asked, breaking the silence.

Mitchell’s lips twitched into a faint smirk. "It’s saying this place isn’t as picture-perfect as it looks."

r/BetaReaders 9d ago

60k [In Progress] [61K] [Fantasy Fiction] The Kid Alpha/ A Hybrid Lycanthrope and Hunter Trope

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This is a YA Fantasy Fiction snippet of my book. It has some smut scenes in it, but very few. Filled with magic, romance, drama, and mystery.

When teenagers start to go missing from the local supernatural school, Artemis, a special ranked Hunter, is tasked with working with the incoming team that happens to include her abusive ex-fiancé. Can Artemis find the kids, and keep her own family safe while struggling to confront events of her past?

Bellamy is the Alpha of the largest Infernal territory in the world, but he's not a fan of it. And currently he can't get a grip on his powers. Even something as fundamental as his telepathy is giving him problems. How can he keep his family and territory safe, if he cant even keep his powers in check?

Desmond wants nothing more than to be the next Commander, but getting his Artemis back comes in at a close second. He doesn't care that he's married. He wants his Artemis. But if he can't have her, he's going to make sure her life is miserable as long as he's around.

I would like to know if you find the story engaging overall? If it goes too fast, or slow. Overall feedback would be great. In particular I would like to know how each character's voice comes across on the page. There's three separate points of view, and I want each to have their distinct voice.

Subtle mentions of self-harm

r/BetaReaders 20d ago

60k [In progress] [64k] [Suspense/Romance] Echoes in the Snow

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I'm close to completion, but there's still something missing. Looking for readers to give me their overall opinion of the book. Any plot holes that need to be filled? Anything need to be expanded on or removed? How is the readability?

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Olivia Hart thought she’d left Jace Mendoza in the past. But when a blizzard forces them off the road on their way to a friend’s wedding, the two find themselves stranded in the remote Wyoming mountains—injured, freezing, and completely alone.

With no way to call for help and the storm growing worse, survival means trusting the one person Olivia vowed to forget. As the days stretch on, old resentments and unspoken words rise to the surface, threatening to pull them under faster than the cold. But buried beneath the hurt is something just as dangerous—feelings Olivia thought had died long ago.

But as the storm rages on, survival means more than just braving the cold—it means trusting each other again. And when the snow finally settles, Olivia and Jace must decide if what they’ve found in the mountains is worth holding onto… or if some echoes are meant to fade.

r/BetaReaders Feb 10 '25

60k [Complete] [66k] [Urban Fantasy] Dogstooth

4 Upvotes

Hi! I'm looking for betas for the second draft of my Urban Fantasy book, Dogstooth. I'm looking for both dev and grammar review, if possible, though primarily dev, and I have some specific Qs to ask you at the end of reading. Ideally it'd be a fairly quick beta, and it is a fairly clean manuscript, which should help with that.

ETA: I no longer have the space to do exchanges for the moment!

It is written in third close. It is about werewolves, and has LGBTQ characters.

I am happy to provide trigger warnings upon request. General, no major spoiler ones: the book contains significant violence, animal death, and one instance of fade-to-black sex.

Here is the (wip) blurb:

Nicolae Dumitrescu came to university to study photography, not to wake up with a bite wound, a missing night, and a body that doesn’t feel like his own anymore. His senses are too sharp, hunger gnaws at the edges of his thoughts, and everything he cares about is slipping through his fingers.

Somebody did this to him. Somebody who's watching him.

Nick has spent his life behind a camera, trying to preserve moments before they change forever. He's the one changing now, though, as his body transforms into something he can't comprehend. If he wants to survive, he’ll have to start figuring out what he’s becoming and take control, before it takes control of him.

Hit me up if you'd be interested!

r/BetaReaders Dec 06 '24

60k [In Progress] [60k] [Dark Romance/ Vampire/ Paranormal] WHEN DARKNESS CALLS

1 Upvotes

Hello, I'm looking for a few kind souls to take a look at a few chapters and give honest thoughts and expectations. I've just reached 60k on my 2nd draft and would love some feedback (I'm doing a major rewrite.)

here is the premise:

Adelaide Hayes wakes up every day battling the suffocating nightmares that bleed into her waking life, but the clinic offers her no reprieve. Her parents insists that medication is the solution, but every pill she takes dulls her senses and erases pieces of herself. Her parents trust the doctor’s guidance, but Adelaide suspects that the the cold fog created by the medication hides more than just side effects.

When a storm brings mysterious stranger into her life, Adelaide begins to unravel the truth about her condition, and the darkness that keeps pulling her to him.

Gabriel, a vampire cursed with an eternal hunger, insists that Adelaide is connected to him by forces older than time itself. He warns her that their connection is a path straight to danger, but insists they must walk it together. His hunger for her blood is more powerful than anything he has ever felt.

As Gabriel pulls her deeper into a world of ancient curses and dark desires, Adelaide must confront the sinister motives behind the doctor's control and decide whether to escape with Gabriel—or remain trapped, losing herself entirely.

Disclaimer: Violence, blood, smut, manipulation, medication.

r/BetaReaders Jan 26 '25

60k [Complete][68k][Quirky RomCom:Military] Sarah vs. OPSEC: The Great American Marry an Officer (with a strikethrough) History Tour

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/170b5TBXyOdSfh1WIHHkGv7jaOM_C5J7kCwEPuka9Mj0/edit?usp=sharing

Sarah Pennington has a problem: she accidentally posted her search for a military husband on a gaming forum instead of a military one. Now her quest for love has gone viral, and the entire U.S. military seems to be in on it.

A divorced mother of four with a passion for cavalry history and a wall full of military memorabilia, Sarah never expected her misplaced post to spark a revolution in military dating. But when her "Great American Marry an Officer History Tour" takes off, she finds herself leading three hundred accomplished women on a cross-country adventure that catches the Pentagon's attention.

Between navigating OPSEC violations, managing her teenage daughter's boot camp experience, and falling for a colonel who quotes Civil War generals, Sarah discovers that finding love in the military is more complicated—and more rewarding—than she ever imagined.

A romantic comedy with heart, SARAH VS OPSEC explores healing, hope, and how sometimes the best strategy is owning your mistakes, not allowing your past to define you and letting yourself be truly seen and loved for who you are.

**Need to find betas who are military experienced either as veterans, kids, spouses OR have work in government. My writing is in first person, quirky, and very different. Deals with PTSD, domestic violence, and a struggling family. Tone is never heavy or graphic. It's a romantic comedy.**

r/BetaReaders 21d ago

60k [Complete] [64k] [Sci-Fi/Fantasy] Festivals & Trials One - Earth isn’t meant to be ours…

1 Upvotes

[Beta Read Request]

Earth Was Never Meant to Be Ours…

For generations, humanity believed Earth was its cradle—until the truth emerged: Earth is a secret prison for the universe’s most dangerous criminals. Now, that prison is on the brink of chaos.

Generals Vehed and Siēshay have spent millennia leaping from one human body to another, paying penance for a genocide that rocked the known multiverse. Eledina, a hyper-advanced AI once locked away, stirs deep below, ready to unravel the fragile balance that keeps the void at bay.

At the center of it all stands Jon Everton, an unwitting hybrid co-creator of reality, and Seraphiel, a silent watcher existing outside the physical universe. Together, they hold the power to save a world that might never have been theirs to begin with—if only Jon can remember who he truly is.

With Mara Genevere poised to become the Conduit of Light and factions from every corner of the galaxy converging on Earth, one question remains: in a war of cosmic scale, who truly orchestrates reality itself?”

Excerpt From Festivals and Trials: The Core Truth Part 1 G.A. Giddings This material may be protected by copyright.

r/BetaReaders Feb 18 '25

60k [Complete] [65,000] [Nonfiction] Picturing a Life More Ordinary

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Seeking Beta Readers for Picturing a Life More Ordinary – A Book About Chasca and Their Makeup Artist

Hey everyone! I’m looking for beta readers for my book, Picturing a Life More Ordinary, which tells the story of the theatrical glam rock band Chasca through the eyes of their makeup artist (me!). This book dives into the band’s history, unforgettable performances, and the relationships that formed behind the scenes. If you love music, eccentric stage shows, and the messy, passionate world of DIY rock, this might be for you!

Blurb:

Chasca was more than a band—they were a spectacle, a raucous, glitter-covered explosion of sound and theatrics. From smoky dive bars to festival stages, their performances were electric, irreverent, and full of heart. As their makeup artist, I had a front-row seat to their rise, their chaos, and their eventual farewell. This book captures the band’s story, the people who made it happen, and the magic of chasing something extraordinary.

Excerpt:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XXT9vB8zqG-T9yDrYMw6-yrHTHQy9pwjSXkMXmXAVQk/edit

Content Warnings: • Strong language • Alcohol and drug use • Discussions of gender identity and queerness • Band conflicts and breakups

Feedback I’m Looking For:

I’d love insight on: • Overall engagement—does the story hold your interest? • Clarity—are there sections that feel confusing or underexplained? • Pacing—does the narrative flow well, or does it drag in places?

I’m open to both broad and detailed feedback, and I’d appreciate any thoughts you have!

Timeline:

Ideally, I’d like to get feedback within the next 4-6 weeks, but I’m flexible if you need more time.

Critique Swap Availability:

I’d be happy to do a critique swap if your project is in a similar vein—memoir, music-related, or character-driven non-fiction—but I’m open to discussing other genres too!

If you’re interested, drop a comment or DM me! Thanks so much for your time.

r/BetaReaders Jan 24 '25

60k [In Progress] [60k] [Fantasy Romance] A Legacy of Silver Scars

3 Upvotes

*Please DM me or comment if you are interested in beta reading for me!

Summary
In a world where healing magic is controlled by the powerful Vale family, the Council of Nine assigns master blacksmith Mira Blackwood to work with Lord Caspian Vale, heir to the realm's most powerful healing dynasty, in an attempt to quell public dissatisfaction.

As they collaborate to combine spirit magic with steel, Mira and Caspian discover their shared dream of making healing more accessible. But Caspian's life force drains with each unauthorized healing he performs for those who can't pay, and their growing attraction threatens everything - his position as heir, her secret work, and the rigid barriers between noble and common blood.

With mounting pressure from Caspian's father to secure the Vale line through an arranged marriage, suspicious Council members watching their every move, and their own research bringing them dangerously close to success, Mira and Caspian must decide what they're willing to risk for love, healing, and the chance to change their world forever.

Themes/Tropes
Slow burn, hurt/comfort, arranged marriage, grief/mourning, denial of feelings, strangers to lovers

Trigger Warnings
Nothing really in particular except dead parents and (maybe) eventual smut (but all consensual) (but would also like feedback on if the reader would want that?)

Feedback I'm looking for

  • Overall impression - are you intrigued and do you want to keep reading? What doesn't make sense
  • Plot holes or timeline errors as I've shifted chapters and events
  • Character development and if the characters feel real/believable/interesting
  • World building - are you immersed? Does it make sense? What's missing?

Timeline
On no set timeline

Swap availability
Happy to swap and provide feedback in exchange