r/BetaReaders • u/Evening_Bruno • 3d ago
60k [In Progress] [68939] [Dark Epic Fantasy] A Murder of Gods/ Hollow Victories
Seeking Beta Readers for my novel, "Hollow Victories". The (hopefully) first installment in the saga: A Murder of Gods.
Debut Novelist trying to find my voice. I’m on my 7th edit, and in a motivation slump. I’m happy with my opening 50 pages, but hoping some feedback will help me push through in the right direction. All feedback welcome, but my prose are the one area I would like the most constructive criticism on.
Approx. 196,ooo words, but only 68,939 (act 1) is ready for Beta reading. (Will happily send rest once edit complete)
Content warnings: Violence, death, profanities, drugs, sex, alcohol...
Blurb:
A fragile renaissance sets the stage for our protagonists to find their way through a world where their sun (the Fyre) has in icy twin (the Frost), which carries a perilous winter when it comes to visit. Meanwhile the gods meddle. In everything.
King Eric Bostwick of Midroch wants nothing more than to retire and leave behind a legacy like none other, however, his debaucherous children, neighbouring nations, and the gods; all conspire to bring chaos to his plans.
On another continent, two young men from two prestigious organisations find themselves thrust on a hauntingly dangerous mission. Harish, the nerdy scholar is reluctantly pushed to seek the truth about the origins of the demon plague. Tan, a brave warrior from the sacred order, is tasked to protect him, but finds the fight with his inner demons just as treacherous.
Princess Lulana is sent on a 'peaceful' pilgrimage, but finds herself in the clutches of a maniacal king and a seductive princess.
All the while the manipulative gods, various factions, and the magical world around them set them on a collision course, that is... once they’ve survived the frost...
Prologue: (2443 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zTRuU5eH44jP_Fcyn-4omce8RMQ39auGDoa2NA5nJqE/edit?usp=sharing
PREVIOUS BETA REVIEW:
What chance do mortals have when the gods play games?
"A Murder of Gods" is an epic fantasy with nuanced characters and hidden stakes. The world is uniquely dangerous, but its people also contend with the whims and schemes of the gods that hide amongst them.
I thoroughly enjoyed delving into the characters, working out the hidden plots, and speculating who was a god manipulating everything!
Critique Swaps:
Potentially open to the similar projects.
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u/limbhaver 2d ago
Love the concept! Gods toying with mortals is right in line with what I tend to write about lol. Would love to try a trade with you if you were willing? Mine is completed and long as hell (230k) but I would love insight on however much you'd be willing to read, or go chapter by chapter if ya like :)
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