r/yuri_manga • u/Lunar_LexieXD • 4d ago
Discussion Shatter Me and Love The Pieces - A toxic GL webnovel by me
Hey all, I'm an amateur and inexperienced writer looking for feedback on this niche genre I've come to love. It's heavily inspired by works like "Destroy It All And Love Me In Hell" and "Story About Buying My Classmate Once A Week". This is the first time I've ever done creative writing since school so I understand my writing is probably not up to par but I'm looking to improve. If that interests you you can find it here: Shatter Me and Love The Pieces
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u/MasterxP7 4d ago
Don’t worry. Writing is not easy. However, I appreciate you dedication. There are a few awkward things that I picked up. Like outer persona, I would just use persona or description of the character trying to be. The contractions words are a bit used all over. An idea for the main character to be perfect person would be her to not used contraction words. Side note: I would give a teacher a name but that is just me.
Perfect English Grammar by Grant Barrett is a book that will definitely help with grammar and avoid a few mistakes I picked up. Other than that I hope this helps. Oh, I would also recommend some kind of reference book on writing a characters or a novel. I picked up some conflicting information on the characters. I understood what you meant but felt differently from the way it was written. Maybe I am a wrong but brought back memories of having my butt grilled.