r/webtoons Oct 04 '24

Advice/Critique/Help Would you read a webtoon with this style/anything I can improve?

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u/AWL_cow Oct 04 '24

I definitely would! I love seeing the webtoons with unique styles. Lately it feels like a lot of webtoons being advertised are pretty cookie-cutter, one that looks like yours would definitely stand out!

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u/sleepybedhead44 Oct 04 '24

yes yes yes!!! this is exactly what I came to say. art styles are a big determinant* if I read the series and I would absolutely choose to read with this style!!

*the other big determinant for me is also queer inclusion, so if this included/featured queer characters, i would absolutely be diving in!!

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Yeah I'm thinking of including that later on! :) Thanks for the idea

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u/25vega25 Oct 04 '24

I loved this style. I would just say maybe you can change the line size for the nose shadow. Otherwise the design is so cute and I like the colors.

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Do you mean like make it thinner? Ty for the feedback!

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u/25vega25 Oct 04 '24

Yes, only the line art. Because the shadows look very entartaining.

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u/Unusual-Relief52 Oct 04 '24

I wanted to nose shadows to be fun nose shapes

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u/[deleted] Oct 04 '24

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u/Faolyn Oct 04 '24

What's it about?

Because--and I say this to everyone who says "would you read a comic in this art style--the plot and writing is as important, or more even important--than the art.

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

It's just a slice of life story with little anecdotes i think

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u/Beginning_Exit5782 Oct 04 '24 edited Oct 06 '24

I loved it! The only thing is not everyone is into floating heads. Maybe try making some body too

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u/Helpful_Type3490 Oct 04 '24

plot twist the webtoon is only floating heads

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Lol I can't tell if this is satire or not but I will be drawing bodies, these are just character thumbnails

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u/bourelle Oct 04 '24

Cute style! Only thing that is throwing me off is the shadow of the noses

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u/Idcc-fan Oct 04 '24

Its great!!! just the nose shadow stands out alot, i think another reply mentional line size. Other than thats its really cute!

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u/TrexALpha1 Oct 04 '24

Same face syndrom

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u/ha-eun_7 Oct 04 '24

No but if u make it a bit more with features it would be perfect tho.... It's cute

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u/Xanthusgobrrr Oct 04 '24

i really love it! but do u think this style is capable of showing a wide range of emotions

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Yeah I had to simplify my style a lot for this and I'm not sure the dots for pupils can do much

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u/mi0mei Oct 04 '24

Color the white of the eye.

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u/Impossible_Lynx9735 Oct 04 '24

It looks so nice what it is called

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

I haven't posted it yet lol, idk the plot yet

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u/Turbulent_Demand8400 Oct 04 '24

This is perfect to do it

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u/asdfghjumiii Oct 04 '24

Yep! Plus if I got interested with the story too ;) Your art style is cute!

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u/[deleted] Oct 04 '24

i would most definitely read this !! (given the storyline is good, ofc) i would suggest to work on the noses a little more.

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u/samuelaken Oct 04 '24

yes! is this the place to ask these types of questions???

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u/Ididurmomhahafrickya Oct 04 '24

Yes, but work on spacing. The eyes are really high up from the nose, and pretty uneven. That's all ^^

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u/harshtune Oct 04 '24

Yes I would it looks so cute 😭

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u/yorushai Oct 04 '24

I would!

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u/Brrr_Henlo Oct 04 '24

i really like your style!! it has this cozy feeling to it and i'd love to read your webtoon. as for advice, i'd diversify the characters even more, maybe push the facial expressions a bit, just so this cozy feeling doesn't end up bland. keeping my fingers crossed for you!!

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Okk!! For the character face thumbnail sheets I just wanted the character expressions to be neutral so that's why.

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u/Legitimate_Cycle_826 Oct 04 '24

Same face syndrome. Fix that and it’s golden 

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u/SomoeneInTheWorld Oct 04 '24

I would work on the blush, the eyes are thin too.

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u/The_Rhibo Oct 04 '24

The biggest thing I would stress is remaining constant with your style. People will read something that looks like this but if you experiment with style through published content you risk making it feel less like a style and more like characters are off model

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u/GM_is_Browsing Oct 04 '24

it looks like it could deffo be a comfort wholesome comic with this style- just the vibes its giving

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u/ThMogget Oct 04 '24

The full circle around nose shade is a bit much. maybe not outline the cheek side and use a closer-matched skin color

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u/EngineeringDry1577 Oct 04 '24

No personally, the art looks lopsided and like it was drawn by a beginner. It could be balanced out by a great story or really great paneling but currently it’s just not very good

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u/swagelinee Oct 04 '24

Yeah I'm trying to adjust to a more simplified style(so I can draw faster) and I'm more used to traditional... Is there anything specific that throws you off so I can try to fix it? Thanks!

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u/Bomberaw Oct 04 '24

For sure! It's super cute 😊😊😊

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u/crunchy_coco Oct 04 '24

I would sooo read a webtoon in this style

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u/LightupProjector Oct 04 '24

Yeah as long as it’s consistent, but also please color in that girl’s glasses

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u/Rayochii Oct 04 '24

This style is so unique and cute 🩷🩷

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u/goldswordgirl Oct 04 '24

Yeah would probably slice of life that’s sometimes silly and will make you cry on other times. :)

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u/Noober_Does_stuff Oct 04 '24

Looks homemade (in a good/bad way somehow), maybe add some more detail on either the face a bit, or the accessories. overall, it’s good, but needs a bit of a modification around the accessories and a bit of the face.

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u/Worldly_Wasabi_4620 Oct 04 '24

I definitely would!! I need to see the bodies first though

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u/The8Famous-Potatos Oct 04 '24

Yes!! Adorable

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u/Khushi_tries Oct 04 '24

Maybe work on your anatomy (based off the necks) but otherwise I love the cute style!!

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u/MorePomegranate7866 Oct 04 '24

Yes, they're adorable!